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Why, if you love me
Can't we be together?
And why, if we're lovers
Can't you commit?
And why, if I know you
Won't you open up?
And why, if I understand
Won't you lean on me?
And why, if the sex is great
Won't you give it emotions?
And why, if it can work
Won't you let it?
And why, if it sparks
Can't it burn?
And why, if I'm good
Can't I be good enough?
And why, if it hurts
Does it have to hurt so much?
©2006-2009 ~RandomSalamander
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Author's Comments

Written very late, in a slightly depressed state. It's about someone I think about very often, and thought up as it was being submitted. (Or rather WILL be thought up as I'm submitting it in a minute or so.)

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i love this. it's marvelous. very deep. and so very true. i am in a most excrutiatingly similar position with the someone i think of often.
:iconimagenashyun:
Love the diction, its repitition really gives emphasis on pain and confusion. Nice :3

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Like a single rose blooming in the harshest of winter
Hope will always live in times of chaos.

~~Echoes of Silence~~

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Immy :heart:s Cory
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It'll be okay.

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**You have made the parser cry.**

:alien: <--=psion005

Member of *Apophysis
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Aww this poem makes me want to cry...:sniff: I like the way the piece is constructed. :hug:

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Hemp + My Etsy Shop = [link]

15,000 Kiriban coming up. Check out my journal for details.

Art Trades ? Notify me.
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For some reason I skipped over this one every time I read through your gallery, I guess because I assume it's about one of the interests you were with on the internet. Who is it about?

Either way, it's very nice. Makes me smile a little. You write very well, less an eloquent style as much as it is raw emotion. I think that's what catches me about your work a lot, where I concentrate on structure and flow, you write what's on your mind and nothing more.

Simplistic and beautiful.
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forgetting the reasons, this one hurts for anyone that reads it. It's very poignant and gets to someone.

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That was Evil, Twisted and Wrong!!! I love it already!

Thats it, now you've done it! You've finally done it! You blew it all to hell!
*grins*...Do it again?!

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March 5, 2006
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