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Three Poems by ~RandomSalamander:iconRandomSalamander:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Haiku & Eastern


Orchid Reservoir
Oh, the blue orchid
Flowers retain happiness
While humans cannot




Starshine
Stars shine in the night
How they glow, they remind me
Of you and your smile




A Small Note
Music of the world
It inspires the children
To make their own sounds
Rap, rock, jazz, pop, and country
Will live on in their rhythm
©2006-2009 ~RandomSalamander
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Author's Comments

Three different poems, done for creative writing class. The first two are haikus (is that the right pluraly thing?) and the third is a tanka, which is basically an extended haiku. Enjoy my horrible poetry! ^^

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*ImagenAshyun Jan 21, 2006, 11:49:39 PM
Ooooooh, these are very nice :3

1.) So sad yet so true

2.) Awww, how sweet :3

3.) Really good, a nice reflection of people and music

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Like a single rose blooming in the harshest of winter
Hope will always live in times of chaos.

~~Echoes of Silence~~

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Immy :heart:s Cory
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~ShiverBeast Jan 21, 2006, 11:50:41 PM
Wonderful :clap:

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Art Trades ? Notify me.
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*fanficbug Jan 22, 2006, 1:23:37 PM
Four things:

1) Haiku, being a Japanese word, doesn't have a plural in its original Japanese form. Since you're posting in English, I'd say it's acceptable either way you write it. ^_^

On the poems:

1) Awww, sad! But, it has good imagery. I wonder why you chose the orchid? I can imagine why with the blue, but was there anything significant behind the choice of flower?

2) Creates a nice, warm, happy feeling upon reading. :)

3) Mmmmm, nice thought. Makes me happy.

Conclusion:

You're quite good at the haiku and the tanka forms. :)

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~RandomSalamander Jan 22, 2006, 1:47:47 PM
Thanks everyone for the wonderful comments. I chose a blue orchid because that's the title of a song I was listening to almost constantly at the time, and it's the only type of flower that I could think of for about a month.

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Disco? With mahself? OUTRAGEOUS!
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*fanficbug Jan 22, 2006, 1:52:15 PM
:-D I commented because I liked them. Well, that, and I had time to comment. :p

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~ZhaoWuxia Jan 22, 2006, 8:45:42 PM
I particularly like the first. I do envy those flowers...what you said is so true.

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Man is Evil by nature. -Xun Zi

Therefore its existence is a crime, and its punishment is death.
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!robertmonroe Jan 30, 2006, 3:14:48 AM
...how come you can write poetry and i cant??? x____x
i envy you man, you could get a career out of poetry :3

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~x-spermthief-x Mar 12, 2006, 10:01:43 AM
so prettyfully rad.. i love them all, *claps loudly*
xXxcharliexXx

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Much love
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~Grischnakh Jul 30, 2006, 12:53:40 AM
I do like the first one and the last one, YAAR!
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